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A week ago, my husband Doug advised me that I needed to include some excerpts from my novel-in-progress on my blog. This morning, he advised me that I need to be blogging between novel excerpts. Sigh. For once, I wish we could talk about his needs. In the meantime, though, here's another excerpt: I can't believe there was a girl in the world who thought that Diana's brother was anything other than a dream. I'd had a crush on him ever since Diana and I had become friends, with almost as little luck as my brother Brian had had attracting the interest of Diana. Diana shrugged off boys in general, though, laughed at their infatuations with her, in fact, so Brian was just one of many rejected, whereas Jack always had a girlfriend, and usually more than one, and sometimes several more waiting in the wings. It was easy to see why. Every girl I knew who had been out with Jack described him later as the most polite boy they'd ever known. He treated girls like ladies, and while it was true he didn't stay with one for very long before moving on, none of those left behind had a sorry word to say about him. And he made sure their reputations were intact upon breaking up with them, too. He may have made out with some of the girls, but he never took serious advantage of any girl he liked. Jack was outgoing, popular, athletic, and sensitive. He could be the life of the party, but he didn't have to be. I'd seen him hole up in a corner with a date and just talk for hours, not needing or wanting to be the center of anyone's attention but hers. I guess maybe he had a problem with commitment, but after all, he was still a kid-- don't parents discourage teenagers from getting overly committed, too soon? To top it all off, Jack was the most gorgeous guy God ever made, with jet-black curls like Diana's, but with misty green eyes, instead of her gray-blue ones. Hers were stormy skies, and his vast, deep oceans. Going out with him that one, wonderful night was kind of like being with her, only with at least the hint of romantic possibility. Which is to say, it was heaven on earth.

Posted by Katy on 11/11/01 at 10:13 PM

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Mrs. Raymond, your novel excerpt is really good. it makes me want to sing "a little ditty 'bout Jack and Dian(a), two American kids growin' up in the the heartland"
Posted by kristen on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
Jon--No, I haven't, and if you could see the tangled jumble of 14,000 words I have amassed so far, you'd know why. I had a pretty clear idea of the theme, characters and plot structure of the story when I started. 11 days later, I've got the theme, and most of the same characters, but an entirely different story! NaNoWriMo is a great event for getting your feet, and a whole lot more, throroughly drenched. Thanks, Jon, and don't be shy about your space opera! Start young is my advice!
Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
BTW, I very much meant to say "Jonathan."
Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
I think I'm in love, Mrs. Raymond. Will this be published? :)
Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
Dee--In love with Jack? You might want to reserve judgment a little while longer...stay tuned. Right now, this is just an exercise to see if I can actually write something long and half-way decent--the jury's still out! But I am planning to pursue writing on a more serious basis, regardless. So nice of you to ask!<br>
Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
Katy, This is great! I've always liked your short stories, so I know this novel will be wonderful! You are soooo creative. I look forward to more excerpts and blogging! <br>
Posted by Nancy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
Nancy--Doug didn't pay you to say this because he's your sister, did he? Kidding. Thanks for the encouragement--I need it! See you on Thanksgiving, girl!
Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
I'd just like to say that Katy is my mom. She's amazing.
Posted by Carrie on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
Hey, my woman! BTW, if Erin in novel bears any resemblance to Carrie, it is purely accidental, incidental or purposeful. Love you, Cake!
Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
No, no, no. In love with your story writing :). Though black curls _ are _ rather nice :).
Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
wow..mrs. raymond..i just spent way too much time reading excerpts from your novel..though, i must say, it was time well spent. i look forward to reading more! =)
Posted by madi on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
Dee--So, not Jack? Phooey. I was really hoping to successfully portray him as imperfect, yes, but basically one of those guys who "has you at hello." Would chocolate brown eyes help? Tee, hee.
Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
Madi--Thanks! I should make the excerpts shorter, for the sake of my blog readers who are "making the rounds." Thanks for being patient with my obsession with inflated word counts--just because I gotta' hit 50,000 doesn't mean I have to include many at a time here. I miss your blog!
Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
chocaltie/hazel eyes are good, mrs. raymond...i think long excerpts are great...it keeps readers wanting more, you know? and thanks, perhaps one day i'll start blogging again..but do something different. only 32,000 more words left to go!
Posted by madi on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
I think blue eyes and curly black hair are a great combination...especially if you're going for a bit daring. Brown eyes are always magnificent :).
Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
I think blue eyes and curly black hair are a great combination...especially if you're going for a bit daring. Brown eyes are always magnificent :).
Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
Ugh...a double post on a _blogback comment_. How shameful.
Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM
Boy, Mrs. Raymond, your novel is a lot more readable than would be the allegorical space opera that I would be writing if I hadn't chickened out of NaNoWriMo at the last minute. Have you written a novel before?
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In the meantime, though, here's another excerpt: I can't believe there was a girl in the world who thought that Diana's brother was anything other than a dream. I'd had a crush on him ever since Diana and I had become friends, with almost as little luck as my brother Brian had had attracting the interest of Diana. Diana shrugged off boys in general, though, laughed at their infatuations with her, in fact, so Brian was just one of many rejected, whereas Jack always had a girlfriend, and usually more than one, and sometimes several more waiting in the wings. It was easy to see why. Every girl I knew who had been out with Jack described him later as the most polite boy they'd ever known. He treated girls like ladies, and while it was true he didn't stay with one for very long before moving on, none of those left behind had a sorry word to say about him. And he made sure their reputations were intact upon breaking up with them, too. He may have made out with some of the girls, but he never took serious advantage of any girl he liked. Jack was outgoing, popular, athletic, and sensitive. He could be the life of the party, but he didn't have to be. I'd seen him hole up in a corner with a date and just talk for hours, not needing or wanting to be the center of anyone's attention but hers. I guess maybe he had a problem with commitment, but after all, he was still a kid-- don't parents discourage teenagers from getting overly committed, too soon? To top it all off, Jack was the most gorgeous guy God ever made, with jet-black curls like Diana's, but with misty green eyes, instead of her gray-blue ones. Hers were stormy skies, and his vast, deep oceans. Going out with him that one, wonderful night was kind of like being with her, only with at least the hint of romantic possibility. Which is to say, it was heaven on earth. Posted by Katy on 11/11/01 at 10:13 PM Fallible Comments... Mrs. Raymond, your novel excerpt is really good. it makes me want to sing "a little ditty 'bout Jack and Dian(a), two American kids growin' up in the the heartland" Posted by kristen on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM Jon--No, I haven't, and if you could see the tangled jumble of 14,000 words I have amassed so far, you'd know why. I had a pretty clear idea of the theme, characters and plot structure of the story when I started. 11 days later, I've got the theme, and most of the same characters, but an entirely different story! NaNoWriMo is a great event for getting your feet, and a whole lot more, throroughly drenched. Thanks, Jon, and don't be shy about your space opera! Start young is my advice! Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM BTW, I very much meant to say "Jonathan." Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM I think I'm in love, Mrs. Raymond. Will this be published? :) Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM Dee--In love with Jack? You might want to reserve judgment a little while longer...stay tuned. Right now, this is just an exercise to see if I can actually write something long and half-way decent--the jury's still out! But I am planning to pursue writing on a more serious basis, regardless. So nice of you to ask!<br> Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM Katy, This is great! I've always liked your short stories, so I know this novel will be wonderful! You are soooo creative. I look forward to more excerpts and blogging! <br> Posted by Nancy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM Nancy--Doug didn't pay you to say this because he's your sister, did he? Kidding. Thanks for the encouragement--I need it! See you on Thanksgiving, girl! Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM I'd just like to say that Katy is my mom. She's amazing. Posted by Carrie on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM Hey, my woman! BTW, if Erin in novel bears any resemblance to Carrie, it is purely accidental, incidental or purposeful. Love you, Cake! Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM No, no, no. In love with your story writing :). Though black curls _ are _ rather nice :). Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM wow..mrs. raymond..i just spent way too much time reading excerpts from your novel..though, i must say, it was time well spent. i look forward to reading more! =) Posted by madi on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM Dee--So, not Jack? Phooey. I was really hoping to successfully portray him as imperfect, yes, but basically one of those guys who "has you at hello." Would chocolate brown eyes help? Tee, hee. Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM Madi--Thanks! I should make the excerpts shorter, for the sake of my blog readers who are "making the rounds." Thanks for being patient with my obsession with inflated word counts--just because I gotta' hit 50,000 doesn't mean I have to include many at a time here. I miss your blog! Posted by Katy on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM chocaltie/hazel eyes are good, mrs. raymond...i think long excerpts are great...it keeps readers wanting more, you know? and thanks, perhaps one day i'll start blogging again..but do something different. only 32,000 more words left to go! Posted by madi on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM I think blue eyes and curly black hair are a great combination...especially if you're going for a bit daring. Brown eyes are always magnificent :). Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM I think blue eyes and curly black hair are a great combination...especially if you're going for a bit daring. Brown eyes are always magnificent :). Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM Ugh...a double post on a _blogback comment_. How shameful. Posted by Dee on 12/31/69 at 06:00 PM Boy, Mrs. Raymond, your novel is a lot more readable than would be the allegorical space opera that I would be writing if I hadn't chickened out of NaNoWriMo at the last minute. 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